Descripiton of Toad Style: “One of the Five Deadly Venoms. Toad Style will be immensely powerful through its immunity to nearly any weapon, once we get the connection rebuilt. Until then, best not meditate by pausing, though it used to give you armor proportional to your Intelligence and Perception.”
I did not understand what was meant with the underlined part. Which connection? Who is “we”? I think the string needs to be rewritten.
Edit: “power armor hauling frame”. I think the term “hauling frame” is a neologism but the description of the item does not explain it. I think the description has to be rewritten or you have to come up with a better term.
0.9, Launchpad no. 6837: “It's skin so tight the cracked bones are visible beneath it, covered in scar tissue and coils of scabbed black liquid and with eyes so deeply sunken into it's skill
they are barely visible, it's a wonder this once-human creature can move at all.”
I think “skull” was meant here.
0.9, Launchpad no. 6962: “A flexous
monstrosity seeming as a giant crab covered in writhing antennae, clawform tentacles and star-shaped growths, with a head like the insides of a fish but for its dire utterance.”
I am not sure, but I guess “flexu
ous” was meant here.
, if he's a no-show then any other gunslinger will do... but I doubt he'll quit before we even begin.”—It’s supposed to be “Roger”, I guess.